会计硕士精英保过学员英语作文批改服务实例_跨考网

　　Dear foreign students：

　　I am glad to introduce myself. My name is Li Ming. I am the monitor of the Accounting Class1.Our class are going to hold a celebration to celebrate the Mid-Autumn Day in the evening on that day.We are very happy to invite you to join us. I am sure you will have a wonderful night and unforgettable.

　　Then I have to tell you something about the Mid-Autumn Day. On that day, our family will buy many mooncakes to give each other to express themselves` wishes---to be together with their family. At night, a lot of people will qo out to watch the moon because the moon will become bigger and rounder than anytimes.In the past people ate mooncakes to commemorate a person---Chang E，the goddess of the moon.If you want to konw more about the story ,you must be quick to anticipate!

　　At last,when you come i suggest writing yout own name on a card and put it on yout clothes in order to make friends with each other.Secondly,you have to prepare a fork or a pair of chopsticks and a plate.We will give you a big surprise.Foreign students,you are far away from home.We hope you can come and will be the happiest family!

　　We are waiting for you!

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