2014考研英语写作160篇:论时间(考生作文批改及评分)_跨考网

　　写作原文

　　①As is vividly betrayed in the cartoon, a juvenile, with great efforts, is pushing a clock hand fordward(拼写错误，改为forward), becase(拼写错误，改为because) he is curious about his futre, (拼写错误，改为future;逗号改为句号) an(改为An) old man, however, is doing his utmost to push the clock hand backward, because he wants to retrospect his old days. ②Apparantly(拼写错误，改为Apparently), what they do is ultimately futile.①Simple as the picture is, its symbolic meaning subtly conveyed(前面加which，构成定语从句，修饰symbolic meaning;conveyed时态使用错误。因此，可改为which subtly conveys) is profound and thought-provoking. ②There is little dispute that time is a sovereign gift for all peple(拼写错误，改为people) and no one is expected to manipulate or speed up it (speed up为动副结构，修饰代词时，代词放中间;可改为speed it up). ③So, attempting a life (加is,构成be filled with)filled with no regrets, one should employ his time well, otherwise, a humilating(拼写错误，改为humiliating) future will be not far away from us. ④In addition, the old saying:"Time and tide wait for no man" also highlights the magnitude of cherishing time. ⑤Therefore, what we are supposed to do everyday is to make use of every chance to do useful things.①As far as I'm concerned, time invariably treats everyone equally. ②One can become informed and wise by treasuring time. ③Mo Yan, for example, who cherishes every minutes(every+名词单数，将minutes改为minute) to think and contemplate (句子缺成分，加“, and he”)has achieved great success in his works. ④Hence let's keep the aphorism in mind forever, that is:"A young idler , (标点使用有误，英语中，每个标点符号后面应该空一个字符，然后再继续书写单词)an old beggar".

　　原作点评:

　　第一段描述图画的内容,应注意拼写问题。第二段揭示图画的寓意，深入探讨珍惜时间的重要性;第①句注意时态的正确使用;第②句注意单词拼写及动副结构的使用。第三段通过举名人的例子及格言“少壮不努力，老大徒伤悲”，点明文章主题。总体点评文章亮点：文章结构完整，每个段落的功能基本得以体现。文章错误：①语法错误：文章出现了少量的语法错误，比如时态一致性问题;every+名词单数等。②拼写问题：单词拼写错误情况较为严重，望细心改正。

　　修改意见：

　　文章整体构思、用词还不错，但是单词拼写错误较多。希望作者在以后的写作中，避免这一问题的发生。同时要注意在复习过程中，留意一些基本的语法点，减少作文中的错误。可以结合英语写作范文，积累更多的词汇和句子，为作文添彩。加油，祝你考研成功!!

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