2014考研英语小作文批改例文：邀请信（二）_跨考网

　　0-4分》》考研英语复习指导

　　第一篇

　　Dear Bob，

　　There will be held a wonderful music concern for piano and violin in the Musical Hall of the Centre Conservatory Of Music on Junuary 15st . We would be honored to have you there with us.

　　The occasion will start at 7:00 PM on time. This will be followed by a ticket that we have to given you by Express Email Survice before the concern. At around 6:50PM, January 15st, you may arrived to the CCOM because staff is checking our tickets ahead of time.

　　I really hope you can make it RSVP before 6:50PM,January 15st,2013.

　　Sincerely yours,

　　Li Ming

　　Dear Bob，

　　There will be held (删除)a wonderful music (音乐会是concert)concern for(改为concerning) piano and violin in the Musical Hall of the Centre Conservatory Of Music on Junuary(拼写错误，改为January) 15st . We would be honored to have you there with us.

　　The occasion will start at 7:00 PM on time. This will be followed by a ticket that we have to given you by Express Email Survice before the concern. (理解有误，本意是让你写在这个occasion后面是另外一个活动)At around 6:50PM, January 15st, you may arrived to the CCOM because staff is checking our tickets ahead of time.

　　I really hope you can make it RSVP before 6:50PM,January 15st,2013.

　　Sincerely yours,

　　Li Ming

　　2分

　　同学你好，你对模版的理解不透彻，还不清楚每部分要写的内容，建议你看看论坛上别的同学的作文，了解一下每部分具体要写什么内容。

　　第二篇

　　Dear Mark，

　　There will be a volunteer activitiy in the Children's Welfare Institute Of Nanjing on this weekend . We would be honored to have you there with us. The occasion will start at 08:00.This will be followed by one more arrangement .At around10:00, there will be another activity after the performance. All of us are going to Zhongshan park to have a Picnic, while helping Lily, the youngest girl in our group, to celebrity her birthday. I really hope you can make it. RSVP before the deadline for September 15th.

　　Dear Mark，

　　There will be a volunteer activitiy(拼写错误，改为activity) in the Children's Welfare Institute Of Nanjing on this weekend . We would be honored to have you there with us. The occasion will start at 08:00.This will be followed by one more arrangement(此处应该写一个具体的活动) .At around10:00, there will be another activity after the performance(删除 ). All of us are going to Zhongshan park to have a Picnic, while helping Lily, the youngest girl in our group, to celebrity (改为celebrate)her birthday.(给某人过生日，不要用help)I really hope you can make it. RSVP before the deadline for (删除，RSVP before的意思就是在…之前通知我)September 15th.

　　加Sincerely yours，

　　你的名字

　　3分

　　同学你好，要注意书信的写作格式，你对模版的理解不透彻而且英语基础比较薄弱，建议你多看看满分作文。